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Life
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Literature Text
A Day, A Night
A Fading Light
A Dream, A Fight
Passion for Flight
A Tear of Pain
A Sorry Delight
In The Hands of A Force Unknown
Life is still
Like a Rolling Stone
Tese lines are a reflection of my perception of life based on my experiences
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Hey there,
Prettyflour here on behalf of with the critique you requested.
Wow... I'm not sure what to critique in this poem... It is simple and beautiful, it seems well thought out. I like the way you used capital letters to give certain words a little more power. It made reading it easy, and made you message clear.
You made good choices with the structuring- centering the words was a nice touch. Overall, I very much enjoyed this. It makes me want to read more of your work!
I hope this was helpful. Thanks so much and have a great night!
Prettyflour here on behalf of with the critique you requested.
Wow... I'm not sure what to critique in this poem... It is simple and beautiful, it seems well thought out. I like the way you used capital letters to give certain words a little more power. It made reading it easy, and made you message clear.
You made good choices with the structuring- centering the words was a nice touch. Overall, I very much enjoyed this. It makes me want to read more of your work!
I hope this was helpful. Thanks so much and have a great night!