literature

Life

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Literature Text

A Day, A Night

 

A Fading Light

 

A Dream, A Fight

 

Passion for Flight

 

A Tear of Pain

 

A Sorry Delight

 

In The Hands of A Force Unknown

 

Life is still

 

Like a Rolling Stone

Tese lines are a reflection of my perception of life based on my experiences
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prettyflour's avatar
Hey there,

Prettyflour here on behalf of :iconpoeticalcondition: with the critique you requested.

Wow... I'm not sure what to critique in this poem... It is simple and beautiful, it seems well thought out. I like the way you used capital letters to give certain words a little more power. It made reading it easy, and made you message clear.

You made good choices with the structuring- centering the words was a nice touch. Overall, I very much enjoyed this. It makes me want to read more of your work!

I hope this was helpful. Thanks so much and have a great night!